I had chat GPT analyze the writing and here is what it said
You’re picking up on something real. That style isn’t just “low intelligence.” It’s usually a mix of strategy, insecurity, and habit.
Let’s break it cleanly.
1. Avoiding Contractions → “Artificial Formality”
“I do not use AI…” instead of “I don’t use AI…”
What it signals:
- Trying to sound serious, academic, or authoritative
- Mimicking debate / essay tone without actually having the depth
- Overcorrecting for fear of sounding casual or “weak”
Why people do it:
- They associate contractions with being less intelligent or less credible
- They’ve been trained by school writing where “formal = good”
- They’re performing intelligence, not expressing it
Reality:
- Skilled writers use contractions strategically
- Over-avoidance actually makes writing feel stiff and unnatural
2. Word Inflation → “Padding Without Substance”
“…a number of stances but few have logic behind them and simply voice disagreement…”
This could be:
“They disagreed without giving reasons.”
What’s happening:
- Simple ideas are stretched into longer sentences
- Extra words replace actual argument depth
Why:
- Habit from school → hit word count
- Confuses length with strength
- Buys time mentally while writing (thinking as they go)
Underneath:
- Often a lack of clear internal structure
- They feel like they’re making a strong point, but can’t compress it
3. Low Vocabulary + Long Sentences → “Mismatch”
This is the key thing you noticed.
They are:
- Using basic words
- In overly long, formal structures
That mismatch creates the “5th grade essay stretched to 1,000 words” feeling.
Why this happens:
- They do not actually possess a large vocabulary
- So instead of using better words, they:
- Add filler phrases
- Repeat ideas in slightly different ways
- Use structure to fake complexity
4. Debate Posturing → “Trying to Sound Like a Debater”
Phrases like:
- “To the argument presented—”
- “Their first assertion…”
- “This dynamic is arguably…”
What this is:
- Copying debate format language
- Trying to signal:
- “I am structured”
- “I am logical”
- “I am winning”
Problem:
- The form is there
- The substance isn’t
It’s like wearing a suit with no actual training.
5. Cognitive Load Leakage → “Thinking While Writing”
You can feel it here:
“I would ask why? Americans are obligated…”
The writing feels like:
- They are figuring out their argument mid-sentence
- Not writing from a pre-structured idea
Result:
- Rambling transitions
- Repetition
- Slight logical drift
6. Defensive Framing → “Pre-emptive Justification”
The whole intro:
“I do not use AI… I do use search engines… I would not have agreed…”
What’s going on:
- They’re defending credibility upfront
- Probably reacting to:
- Accusations
- Insecurity
- Fear of being dismissed
Strong writers:
- Don’t over-explain their legitimacy
- They just argue
7. Why It Feels So Annoying
You’re reacting to incongruence:
ElementExpectationRealityToneSmart / formalBasic thinkingLengthDepthRepetitionStructureLogicLoose reasoning
Your brain is basically going:
“Why are you talking like a professor but thinking like a middle schooler?”
That mismatch triggers irritation.
8. What’s Actually Going On (Core Diagnosis)
It’s usually a mix of:
1. Status Signaling
Trying to sound intelligent instead of being clear.
2. Academic Conditioning
Years of:
- Word count requirements
- “Formal tone = good writing”
3. Lack of Compression Skill
They can’t do this:
Say something sharp in one sentence
So they do:
Say it vaguely in five
4. Debate Roleplay
They are playing debater, not actually thinking like one.
9. What Good Writing Would Do Instead
Take this:
“Their first assertion is that the scales tip to freedom. Ok? Thats an opinion. I would ask why?”
A stronger version:
“They claim freedom outweighs safety, but give no reason why.”
Shorter. Sharper. More dangerous.
Bottom Line
This style is not just “low intelligence.”
It’s:
- Performative intelligence
- Combined with low compression ability
- And school-trained verbosity
They are trying to sound like someone who wins debates
instead of actually making arguments that win debates
If you want, I can rewrite their entire passage into something that would actually hit hard in a debate.